"Onto the stage may we please have all of the 11 and under Grand Line competitors," Gary Pate announced as we, The Jill Justin Dance Alliance strutted onto the largest stage on the east coast. This was it, the moment every Battle of the Stars contestant had been waiting for. Who would be the title of World Champions?
As we stood gripping one another's hand, our knuckles turned white as ghosts in anxiousness. The entire room was silenced as fourth and third runner ups were called. At this point during the awards ceremony, you could smell the cooking taste of nervousness surface the air."Second runner up goes to... Scream!" Gary proclaimed wide-eyed" Now, listen carefully.The next dance I'm about to call is the first runner up and the studio that did not have their dance called will be the champions." We shook in the uneasiness that congested the convention center. "Congratulations Gaga, you are the first runner ups. This means, congratulations to The Jill Justin Dance Alliance that performed, Fashionista!" Gary Pate excitedly exclaimed his final words of the day. We, The Jill Justin Dance Alliance were champions!
Click the link below to view our dance:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bVYv6AYt-gs
Your sensory detail paragraph is really nice, Ailis!! I can visualize the scene in my head and I can get a view of the knuckles you mentioned turning "ghostly white", and I can also feel the tension that the competitors had felt during the announcement of the winners. It was really descriptive, and it had good use of vocabulary. I like your sensory detail paragraph a lot.
ReplyDeleteGood job! :)
-Abeer Khan ☺ ♥